Short film script – First Draft

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  1. James Cooper says:

    Haha, nice. But for some reason I suspect Roomba more than Naomi…

  2. Erika says:

    I think you should change one of the characters to a redhead. Blondes and brunettes are represented way too much in film as it is.

  3. Anonymous says:

    Just happened upon this site. Not sure if you have made the film yet, but it seems real nice. You lead the audience with the Rat-Guy and with hints in dialogue. In your next draft, try to differentiate the voices more. Also, a lot of time is taken in the setup, see if you can multi-task this a bit more with the suspense. Maybe she’s afraid of getting caught. Ton’s of play and lot’s of fun choices to be had. Keep going.

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