I hope they play some Waylon Jennings

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  1. Wormer says:

    I really like this. It made me smile and *almost laugh.
    Good job. :)

    p.s. I’m not stalking just bored at work.

  2. A Lil' Irish Lass says:

    Lovely piece. You did a great job of drawing us in and then pulling the rug out right there at the end. Nice work.

    One minor suggestion, if I may be so bold. At the point where you’re writing about the trucker’s tattoo, I found the “Daisy/Maisy” to be a bit jarring. There’s something kind of shorthand about the slash that clashes with the narrative flow. I think “Daisy or Maisy” would work better there.

    Needless to say, this is just my personal opinion and stylistic choices are purely subjective. I just wanted to throw my two cents in.

  3. JenBun says:

    I like the line about the “never ending ballet of reassuring gluttony.”

    And, of course, your patented twist at the end!

    Bask in the warm glow of my comment.

  4. Steph says:

    You are such an awesome writer Peter. You gotta submit this somewhere!

  5. Michelle and the City says:

    this is a great story peter. and you always get me at the end! :)

  6. theselittlemoments says:

    Oooh a twist! I really throught he was waiting for a woman. Will there be a part 2?

  7. Hollywood Sucker says:

    At first I thought this was just a creative way to tell a true story about something that happened to you…but then, I don’t think you rob diners. Do you?

    Anyway, really enjoyable.

  8. MissE says:

    love the twist, Peter

  9. V says:

    Fantastic. I just found your blog today through Jurgen Nation and while your post on the Canadian Labor party made me laugh (the whole guy who runs the mic bit), this story will keep me coming back. I hope you catch some big fish and come back with some stories to match.

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